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Boise State UniversityBUS COM 201 (1) Adapting the Message to the Audience: For each of the following sentences: First, revise the following sentences by adapting the message to meet the audience’s needs

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Boise State UniversityBUS COM 201

(1) Adapting the Message to the Audience:

For each of the following sentences: First, revise the following sentences by adapting the message to meet the audience’s needs. Second, identify the specific weaknesses in each sentence. Not necessary to write in paragraph format, may list each sentence, then the revised sentence below and highlight weaknesses or list them separately.

 

a.            We want all employees to be familiar with OSHA requirements that pertain to their jobs.

b.         Each project manager must complete the appropriate performance evaluation forms before being awarded his raise.

c.         After the recent downsizing, most employees are beginning to feel like rats on a sinking ship.

d.            Please be advised that the city’s new smoke-free policy is effective on January 1.

e.            Since I took a leadership role on this project, the team’s performance has improved.

f.              The grapevine has it that the company shrink is putting together more tests for us to take by the end of the year.

g.            You failed to read the disclaimer on our website that clearly indicates that the transmitter you ordered does not work with older generation MP3 players. Unfortunately, we cannot honor your request for a refund.

h.         Through strategic alliances and by internal expansion of programs, Lox Enterprises is seeking to develop a substantial market presence as the leading provider of management consulting services in Illinois and its neighboring states.

i.          The best computers available for lease through corporate channels are horribly outdated.

j.          The supervisor asked Quan to go back and make revisions to the final draft of the report so the data will be completely accurate.

 

(2) List the ways in which a sender can cultivate a "you attitude." May write an intro sentence and then list ‘the ways’ and then have a closing sentence.