Lamar State College, -Port ArthurBUSINESS C 2312 Revise the following phrase to avoid “doublespeak”: 1

Lamar State College, -Port ArthurBUSINESS C 2312

Revise the following phrase to avoid “doublespeak”:

1. Vertically deployed antipersonnel device

Indicate whether the following sentences are active or passive, and then revise the sentences to reflect the opposite (if the original is active, revise it to be passive):

2. The recommendation to implement a fraud management program came from J. D. Reese

3. Elizabeth polled only the clients in the Southeast, thereby producing an inaccurate marketing report

Choose the preferred sentence from each pair and justify your choice:

1. (1) Lindsay’s request to telecommute was denied. but she will begin a flextime schedule in two weeks. (2) Although her request to telecommute was denied, Lindsay will begin a flextime schedule n two weeks.

2. (1) The Lawlor account was won. (2) Jennifer is responsible for our winning the Lawlor account.

3. (1) Thank you for donating time to work with the United Way campaign this year. (2) Congratulations on your outstanding work as the campaign coordinator for the 2007 United Way campaign. Our city’s goal was easily exceeded thanks to your exceptional leadership abilities.

4. (1) We appreciate your letting us know about your concerns. (2) We appreciate your letting us know about the broken equipment, the outdated materials, and the poor employee morale at your branch.

5. (1) Your warranty does not cover these repair charges. (2) Had you completed all scheduled maintenance on your Lincoln LS, your warranty would have covered these repair charges.