Lamar State College, -Port ArthurBUSINESS C 2312 Revise the following sentences, adding emphasis to the lists: 1

Lamar State College, -Port ArthurBUSINESS C 2312

Revise the following sentences, adding emphasis to the lists:

1. Our department needs two more engineers. The workload is such that the three engineers currently on staff are out of town on site at least three days a week. Although their work is satisfactory, at this pace, it could suffer soon. Morale is also starting to become a concern. Additionally, because of the increasing workload, it has become difficult for them to attend to routine administrative tasks in a timely fashion.

Link a sentence to the preceding sentence to improve an abrupt change in thought (coherence):

2. Diversity awareness training seems important to some employees. It is very effective in improving communication and understanding. Employees should participate in this training.

Improve readability by dividing each of the following sentences into shorter sentences:

3. Several members of our firm will be touring the manufacturing plant in Tokyo during the week of May 16, 2016, and upon return to the United States will present a slide show documenting the trip, followed by a question-and-answer session, both to be held in the banquet hall of the Ashton Hotel in Denver on Friday, May 27.

Revise the following sentences by replacing a difficult word with a short, simple word to raise the readability index.

4. Assembling the proposal required perusing voluminous stacks of files for the pertinent information.

5. The new concentration of the agency reflects a ubiquitous necessity for clean energy.