Write a response essay to Owen's article (8 pages )

Write a response essay to Owen's article (8 pages ). Based on the article but should use more references. I attached my paper but my Professor said I do need to rewrite it, especially the parts on "Yen chih" do not make any sense.  Can you help me check on it and rewrite it? Tips:  study what shi yan zhi ??? really means? The paper I wrote is just a little reference. Don’t even copy anything on it because my Professor has a very bad feedback on it.Please attach the plagiarism check.