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BUS211 Hello, I need some revisions on the attached files, please see book INSTRUCTIONS/EXAMPLES below: Part 1: E-mail Read the Radical Activity 5

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BUS211 Hello, I need some revisions on the attached files, please see book INSTRUCTIONS/EXAMPLES below: Part 1: E-mail Read the Radical Activity 5.1 on page 140; however, you do not need to list the weaknesses of the message. Instead, please provide the message so that it is clear, concise and purposeful. Be sure to use the direct strategy for writing business messages and use appropriate e-mail formatting. This message should be at least 3 short paragraphs and include an opening, body and closing. (If you have an e-text, the page numbers may vary. Please look for the assignment by the activity number - in this case, Activity 5.1) 5.1 Radical: Information E-mail—Hastily Written Message Needs Drastic Revision (L.O. 1) Bien, Inc., is considering launching an internship program, and Nathan Weintraub, manager of Human Resources, seeks information from members of the management team. Your Task. Study the first draft of his hastily written message and list at least five weaknesses. Then revise it to establish a concise, clear message. Consider patterning your revision on Figure 5.1 in this chapter. To: Danika Benoit &..t@bien.com> From: Nathan Weintraub &..b@bien.com> Subject: Interns? Hi, Danika, You may remember that some time ago our management team here at Bien talked about an internship program. The topic has come up again at this time, and I'm taking this opportunity to ask you to please answer some questions about whether this is a good idea or not. As our organization continues to expand, interns might make sense. But there are many points that we need to discuss, and I've put together a few questions that I think we should cover at the next management meeting. Please mark your calendar to meet on March 14 at 9 a.m. in the morning. First, we really need to discuss whether an internship program is advantageous to us here at Bien. In addition, what are the disadvantages? Next, what are some of the ramifications legally of hosting an internship program here in our state? Another question that enters my mind is whether we should pay interns. Do they receive college credit instead? I wonder if that serves as satisfactory compensation. Finally, we need to discuss where this program would be launched within Bien. What departments would pilot such a program? I hope you will give careful thought to these questions and come prepared to discuss. Nathan Weintraub Manager, Human Resources | n..b@bien.com | Cell: 566.201.9033 Part 2: Adjustment Letter Please read the adjustment letter in Activity 6.3 on page 176 of the text. Then, rather than following the instructions from the text, please provide similar letter instead of listing weaknesses and outlining a writing plan. Be sure to use the direct strategy for adjustment messages in 3-4 short paragraphs and use appropriate business letter formatting, including company and receiver address blocks, date, salutation and complimentary close. "6.3 Radical: Adjustment Letter—Sagging Canvas Needs Restretching (L.O. 4) When a company received an expensive office painting with sags in the canvas, it complained. The seller, Central Park Gallery, responded with the following adjustment letter. How can it be improved? Your Task. Analyze the letter. List its weaknesses. If your instructor directs, revise the letter. Current date Ms. Sharon Nickels 2459 Drew Street Clearwater, FL 33765 Dear Ms. Nickels: Your letter has been referred to me for reply. You claim that the painting recently sent by Central Park Gallery arrived with sags in the canvas and that you are unwilling to hang it in your company's executive offices. I have examined your complaint carefully, and, frankly, I find it difficult to believe because we are so careful about shipping, but if what you say is true, I suspect that the shipper may be the source of your problem. We give explicit instructions to our shippers that large paintings must be shipped standing up, not lying down. We also wrap every painting in two layers of convoluted foam and one layer of Perf-Pack foam, which we think should be sufficient to withstand any bumps and scrapes that negligent shipping may cause. We will certainly look into this. Although it is against our policy, we will in this instance allow you to take this painting to a local framing shop for restretching. We are proud that we can offer fine works of original art at incredibly low prices, and you can be sure that we do not send out sagging canvases. Sincerely, (Name)